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Post by Deleted on Sept 23, 2014 14:46:08 GMT -5
Nocturna
23 ● Female ● non ya damn business ● civillian● nightmare
SPECIES INFORMATION
Abilities ✔ Teleportation short distances only and only in the dark
✔ Create weaker living nightmares from their own flesh is draining and has varied control on them depending on size, number of minions depends on the stamina of the creator
✔ Dream Manipulation alows her to manipulate the dreams on others less effective on adults, can be draining on energy.
✔ Immortal
✔ Shapeshifting a pitch black mare
| Weaknesses ✘ Light of anykind weakens her body and leaves her drained of all energy for a short time
✘ weakest when in their alternate form (defenseless) this form is only used for increased speed and healing purposes.
✘ can be immobilized by blessed weaponary
✘ Can be devoured by their own kind
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Nightmares are beings born in the deepest darkest depths of the realm of dreams they are the sworn enemies of dreams and visions, Their weaknesses include light of any kind be it sunlight or artificial as it weaken their bodies being creatures of darkness they prefer the shadows and dark they are weakest when they are in their alternate shapeshifted form as it renders them defenseless as this form is only used for increased speed and regeneration. As Nightmares are essentially creatures of darkness they are able to teleport to any location they wish, they can also create living nightmares from their own flesh and send them to devour the dreams of others though the number of nightmars created depends vastly upon the stamina of the creator. They can shapeshift to take the form of whatever they wish but the nightmares biggest strength is that they are immortal they can not be killed but can be forced back to the darkness from whence they came. Additionally there can normally only be 7 or 8 nightmares at a time but this isn't always so as nightmares will always arise when ever a new dream is born into the world.PERSONALITY POSITIVE ✔ Playful ✔ Intelligent ✔ Imaginative ✔ Insane ✔ Flamboyant
| NEGATIVE ✘ Cruel ✘ Arrogant ✘ Self obsessed ✘ Insensitive ✘
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Nocturna is quite intelligent for her species as most them prefer to rely on instinct and predatory tactics she prefers to use her flamboyancy and insanity to enhance her playful intelligence to the point of excess sometime sbordering ont he cruel and sadistic her arrogance tends to get her in hot water usually when she attempts to alter a dream that is too powerful for her, Nocturna is a very self obsessed being especially when it comes to looking good she hates lookign like a tramp or a commoner even though no one can see her unless she wants them too she hates it with a passion.APPEARANCE POSITIVE ✔ One ✔ Two ✔ Three ✔ Four ✔ Five
| NEGATIVE ✘ One ✘ Two ✘ Three ✘ Four ✘ Five |
Nocturna has two forms that of a pitch black mare with pure white eyes or that of an attractive young woman with glowing red eyes neither form has any real negatives that she can point out herself but then again no one else can either as they usually end up dead not long after if they did manage to pick up on one of her flaws, Nocturna prefers the term absolutely flawless which is what most would call her if they ever got chance to see her flowing black silk ball gown.MISCELLANEOUS INFO OCCUPATION: N/A POSITION:N/A STATUS: Invisible Supernatural EXTRAS: Please talk about anything else you feel the need to explain here!
OUT OF CHARACTER INFO
Playby: Nightmare Rise of the guardians/ Shadovar Unknown Previous Character: Player Handle: Jeffff Out of Character Account:
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PyroKitten
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Post by Akeekitty on Sept 23, 2014 21:45:21 GMT -5
Well since RS screwed up and lost my previous post I am just going to be quick and blunt about what you need to fix here.
Dream manipulation: I asked you to put a description about this power, how it works, and the flaws pertaining to it which I noticed that you either forgot or didn't bother to put in. Please put something here about that. ( a basic description of the power in the abilities side and then its weaknesses on the weakness side).
Mini- mes (yes I am calling them that): Like I told you before you need to give some info on how her little minions work. How many she can make, if its draining on her, can she control them, and how durable or long they can last, etc. If you are going to have her have minions it makes sense that they aren't as strong or at least have so kind of flaw, cause being able to summon little friends to help in a battle can be pretty OP without some kind of drawback.
Captured in alternate form: I am not sure why this part is relevant. It is stated that she is a lot weaker in her alternate form so it would make sense that she is easier to capture in that form. But with the way you worded that here it sounds as if its impossible for her to be captured, maybe even harmed in her true form which makes no sense.
Alternate form: Because of the previous point I feel like this part needs to be addressed. We know that Nocturna is weaker in her alternate form, but we don't know anything about what her alternate form does for her. What is the point of having another form that will weaken you if you can transform at will? There has to be some benefit to this other form. Does it give her more speed? Endurance? More regenerative powers? Give more detail here so it doesn't sound like its just something put there for the sake of having a flaw.
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Post by Deleted on Sept 23, 2014 23:24:10 GMT -5
Believe issues mentioned have been ironed out but if anythign still needs fixing please let me know as soon as possible and i will fix it even more. Love the cuddly dragon
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PyroKitten
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Post by Akeekitty on Sept 27, 2014 14:46:17 GMT -5
**APPROVED**
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